The pie chart illustrates the pivotal ground that negatively affects the productivity of agricultural land while the table shows information about the proportion of land degradation due to those effects categorized in three separate areas of the world within the 1990s period.

The pie chart illustrates the pivotal ground that negatively affects the productivity of agricultural land while the table shows information about the proportion of land degradation due to those effects categorized in three separate areas of the world within the 1990s period.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart illustrates the pivotal ground that negatively affects the productivity of agricultural land while the table shows information about the proportion of land degradation due to those effects categorized in three separate areas of the world within the 1990s period.
The given chart shows the main causes of
land
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degradation
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around the earth, the pie chart indicates the causes of reduction in overview
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while
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the graph illustrates
causes
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the causes
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of
land
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degradation
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by region. From the pie chart, there are 4 main reasons for worldwide
degradation
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. The highest percentage
being
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is
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over grazing
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over-grazing
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with 35
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percent
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per cent
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then
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, then
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deforestation comes in closely with 30
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percent
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per cent
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, ranked third is over-cultivation with 28
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percent
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per cent
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and
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, and
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other reasons come in
last
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with 7
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percent
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.
Secondly
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, the graph indicates 3 main regions that were affected by
degradation
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. North America has 5
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percent
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total
land
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degraded
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which
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, which
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is the lowest among the 3 regions.
Next,
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Oceania has 13
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percent
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per cent
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total
land
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degraded,
that’s
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8
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percent
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per cent
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more than North America
but
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, but
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the highest
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percent
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in total
land
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degraded goes to Europe
with
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, with
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23
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percent
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per cent
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in total
land
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degraded. Each country has a different percentage for different reasons of
their
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its
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land
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degradation
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.
For example
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, North America
only has
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0.2
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percent
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per cent
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in
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of
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deforestation
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while
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, while
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Europe has 9.8
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percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
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, Oceania has 0
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percent
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in
degradation
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by over-cultivation
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while
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both NA and EU suffer from over-cultivation.
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, Oceania has the highest percentage in over-grazing, being 11.3
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percent
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per cent
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which
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, which
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is higher than both NA and EU combined.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • land degradation
  • soil erosion
  • deforestation
  • overgrazing
  • excessive use of chemical fertilizers
  • poor irrigation practices
  • drought
  • desertification
  • climate change
  • loss of fertility
  • comparative analysis
  • agricultural activities
  • biodiversity
  • food security
  • socio-economic impacts
  • remedial measures
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