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Some scientist think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and message should be sent to contact them other scientist think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. discuss both the view and give your opinion

Some researchers believe that other planets have intelligent life forms and
people
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 should try to interact
them
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with them
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,
while
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 others dispute that it is a detrimental concept and
also
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 would be
risk
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a risk
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both
view
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views
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 from my perspective. On the one hand, it can be more useful and incredible to contact
with
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apply
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other planets because of the number of miracles. So
that
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apply
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, some scientists support the idea of sending signals into
space
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. Because
,
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apply
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 if researchers explore
the
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apply
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other
some kind
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kinds
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 of
planet
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planets
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,
this
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 expands human knowledge.
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, if
people
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 perceive
about
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the universe, afterwards, another civilisation could start for
population
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the population
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.
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, most
people
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willing
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are willing
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 to explore the
space
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.
Therefore
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, there is a
highly
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 demand for movies about
space
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 science.
For instance
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, a science-fiction film called ''
Intersteller
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Interstellar
''.
On the other hand
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, some part of
the
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people
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 argue that it has
own
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its own
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 serious dangers. Because
,
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apply
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people
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 do not have
ability
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the ability
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 to know fully about the intentions of any life
exists
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that exists
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. Nobody can
not
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apply
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assure that those who travel to
space
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 will return to Earth alive.
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, everyone
know
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knows
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 that
the
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a
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 large amount of money
spend
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is spent
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 to build
special
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special,
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 powerful spacecraft and other things.
Instead
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 of
this
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 idea,
people
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 should allocate their cash
on
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to
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 more substantial needs on Earth.
Then
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, it is more beneficial for humans.
To sum up
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,
although
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space
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 exploration has its own hazards,
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however
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apply
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interacting
intelligent
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with intelligent
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 life forms can contribute to education. Namely, it brings us numerous extraordinary opportunities for learning.

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improvement
The essay meets the task by saying the two views and giving your own view, but the point is not strong enough. Make a clear goal in the first two lines.
structure
The order of ideas is in places unclear. Use a clear plan: intro, 2 body paragraphs (one for each view) and a short conclusion with your view.
structure
Each body paragraph should have one main idea. Start with a topic sentence and then add a simple reason or example.
language
Grammar errors and some odd word choice make meaning heavy. Use simple, correct forms and check common word pairs (contact with, interact with, dangerous to).
content
You show both sides and give your own view.
linguistic
Linking phrases such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' are used.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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