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Some people believe that there will be a reduction in air travel in the future. Do you think that this trend is a positive or negative development.

The reduction in
air
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travel
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 may be possible in some
countries
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. But
,
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apply
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 most
countries
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 with high development would seek to upgrade and enhance their
air
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 transportation system. I believe that
this
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 belief might be an outcome of a negative development from
countries
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 that are facing problems which are more important than their transportation system.
To begin
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 with,
countries
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 with budgets can easily support their domestic companies or associations.
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, Etihad, Emirates and
Riyad
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 have their own commercial airline,
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 is solely because of their
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countries
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countries'
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 wealth; most
middle
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east
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 and
european
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European
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countries
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 have the
funds
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 to support companies and corporations. So, citizens there will
also
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 acknowledge the growth of
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 industry and will undoubtedly have more choices of
air
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travelling
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travel
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 when they
have decided
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 to
travel
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.
On the other hand
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,
countries
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 that could not provide
funds
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 for
this
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 branch could face problems. Individuals would have
less choice
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fewer choices
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 when travelling and could raise questions
whether
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about whether
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 their country’s
air
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travel
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 is growing or declining. And
finally
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 will believe that their
air
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 transportation is reducing
instead
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 of growing. Of course, some
countries
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 have more important issues to consider
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;
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 they might resort to those problems
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 of wasting their
funds
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 on
air
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travel
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which
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, which
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 might not be as crucial as other complications. In conclusion, I believe that a reduction in
air
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travel
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 is a negative development in some
countries
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. Because
,
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apply
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 some
countries
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 need to
make
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allocate
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funds
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 for other important disputes.
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, decreasing their less important division
which
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, which
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 is
air
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travel
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 in
this
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 case.

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Task response
Make your view clear in the first line and keep it to the end. Say yes or no in the intro and restate it in the end.
Task response
Add ideas that are full. In each paragraph keep one main idea and give a short example.
Coherence and cohesion
Link your ideas well. Use clear signs to show how one idea goes to the next. Begin each paragraph with a topic sentence.
Language use
Watch for grammar and word form. Some lines are not easy to read. Use simple and exact words.
Content
A clear view of the topic is shown.
Structure
The text is placed in three parts with intro, body and conclusion.
Examples
Some good examples are used to back up points.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reduce
  • travel
  • air
  • future
  • less
  • more
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • climate
  • health
  • money
  • jobs
  • work
  • life
  • world
  • policy
  • train
  • plane
  • online
  • meeting
  • energy
  • cost
  • time
  • idea
  • solution
  • problem
  • change
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