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The first chart below show how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below show how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The two pie charts illustrate the proportions of
energy
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consumption
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 in six selected categories in Australian households, which leads to
gas
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emissions
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. The consumed categories include water heating, refrigeration, other appliances, lighting, cooling and heating.
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, it can be clearly seen that the largest rate of
energy
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consumption
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 is heating.
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, the water heating, which is the second-highest proportion of
energy
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consumption
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, is the largest portion of greenhouse
gas
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emissions
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. One of the first things to note is that the most
energy
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 is consumed for heating, with 42% at home.
This
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energy
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consumption
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 brings out the
gas
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emissions
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 consumed, almost a third of
energy
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consumption
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 . It is followed by water heating accounted for 30%, which was the main reason for greenhouse
gas
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emissions
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, with 32% respectively.
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 the
energy
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consumption
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 rate of other household appliances is equivalent to 15%,
this
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 figure means that
gas
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emissions
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 are approximately twice the
energy
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consumption
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 rate. A similar
energy
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consumption
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 pattern was seen on the lower end with lighting and cooling, capturing just 4% and 2%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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