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The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
give
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gives
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 information about the average of CO2
emissions
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 for each person in 4
countries
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namely
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, namely
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United
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the United
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 Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal
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, beetwen
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beetwen
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between
 1967 and 2007.
Overall
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, there is an unsynchronization
beetween
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between
 4
countries
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though
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over
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 40 years. From 1967 to 977,
while
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United
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the United
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 Kingdom
stay
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remained
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 sustainably, the
emisions
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emissions
gas
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of gases
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 from a person who live in Sweden, Italy and Portugal
increase
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increased
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 considerably about CO2
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tones
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tons
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. In the next decade, there was
an
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a
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 significant shift in Sweden. That
decrease
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decreased
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 sharply from over 10
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tones
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tons
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 to 6.5
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tones
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tons
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.
Also
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, the United Kingdom slightly
minimize
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minimises
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 the
emissions
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 of CO2.
Whereas
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,
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apply
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 the Italian and
Portuguese’s
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Portuguese
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emissions
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 still rise. For
Italians
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Italians,
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 the
emissions
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is
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are
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 at
the
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apply
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6.5
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tones
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tons
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, Portuguese
is
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are
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 at 2.9
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tones
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tons
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. From 1987 to 2007, these two
countries
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 still
rise
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rose
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while
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 the
others
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other
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countries
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 still
decrease
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decreased
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, countries, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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