new research has shown that overeating has a bigger problem than hunger, what are the reasons for this problem? how can it be solved?

In recent times, a novel publication from
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in over consumptions larger than appetites. For
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case, we need to brainstorm to isolate what is the cause of
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and demonstrate the solutions for solving it. In
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the point, giving examples, and providing the solutions. A key reason for
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issue lies in the effect
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of overeating
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in humans with long-term effects on health and life quality.
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my opinion, the biggest consequence of overeating
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the
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of developing both diabetes and high blood pressure. For some reasons that make
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eat too much,
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,
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, feelings
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as stress, sadness, or boredom can lead to eating more, even when not hungry.
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easily
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access to unhealthy
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products,
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do
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activities by
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food
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to their places.
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, societies can push
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to eat too much at times family meals, friends,
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culture. To address
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issue, I would provide considerable solutions
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as
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should have individual personal knowledge about healthy routine, nutrition, and portion of
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combining
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with personal plan meals, eat slowly, use smaller portions, drink water, get enough sleep and do exercise properly at least 3 times per week.
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read
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labels to consider the ingredients before purchase, and limit consumption
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junk
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, sugary drinks. In conclusion, even though overeating
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a bigger problem than hunger, real changes by many
people
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can lower overeating and improve health over time.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overeating
  • overeat
  • hunger
  • reason
  • problem
  • health
  • weight
  • risk
  • diabetes
  • heart
  • life
  • plan
  • eat
  • food
  • eat slowly
  • portion
  • water
  • sleep
  • stress
  • feel
  • emotions
  • habit
  • environment
  • price
  • tax
  • label
  • school
  • family
  • work
  • support
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