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the pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of fairmont island, according to a servey of visitors.

the pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of fairmont island, according to a servey of visitors.
The pie charts illustrate the pros and cons
for
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 visiting
at
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fairmont island
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Fairmont Island
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, based on the data
serveyed
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surveyed
 among the tourists.
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though
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 the best thing for visitors is the good
accommodation
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while
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 the worst experience for them is that the accommodation prices are expensive. Looking at the details, the highest advantage for the travellers is good accommodation, which is 40%. The scenery placed
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second with 37%. Culture and the people stood as third and fourth
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 only 1%
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difference, 12% and 11% respectively.
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due to
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 the high cost of living in
fairmont island
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,
this
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 comprises 45% as the most
disadvantage
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 one. It is followed by the poor entertainment in 30%. Bad weather and food quality are a
quater
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quarter
 of the most common advantages
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 20% and 5%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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