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The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a European university had from 2004 – 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of international applicants from four countries that a European university had from 2004 – 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows that the international
applicants
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 who come from
China
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, Japan, America, and Russia are going to apply to a European college between 2004 and 2008.
Overall
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, the
china
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 applicant is the largest number of students for most years, and the Russian is the fewest
applicants
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 over
this
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 period. The main citizenship of the
applicants
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 is
China
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 from 2004 to 2007, which decreased gradually from 27000 to 17000. The following country is America, and the number of
applicants
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 began in 20000 in 2004 and dropped to 10000 in 2007.
In contrast
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, the applicant who belongs to the remaining countries, Japan and Russia, increased steadily until 2007.
However
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, the figure shows a dramatic change in 2008. The dominated country was replaced by America and followed by
China
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. The American applicant climbed more than twice in 2008, from 10000 to 27000.
Conversely
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, the russian student decreased rapidly from 8000 to 4000.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words applicants, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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