School teachers used to be sources of information; however, some people argue that teachers are not as important as before due to the increasing variety of information resources. What is your opinion?

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believe that the governments should have access to
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activites
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activities
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as messages and calls
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safety reasons.
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they consider
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information
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personal
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a personal
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affair and should not be available without permission. In my opinion, I believe the
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personal
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should
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private and not allowed to any
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government
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or officials
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to access
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them
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.
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, the prime advantage of
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the government
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permission to
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fetch
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data from
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gadgets is to
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prevent
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potential crimes.
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modern
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, the
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became the easiest way to get
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in contact
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between
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people
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that fact, all the illegal
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operations
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the mobile phone.
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, during 2023 in Iraq, the government could catch many
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criminals
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their message history.
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a safe society and
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fewer
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crimes.
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, the detrimental
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effects
of
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process can be seen in many cases.
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process
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is contrlled
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contrlled
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controlled
by
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who could have personal matters, which may abuse
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opration
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operation
by
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an
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absolute
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as family
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videos
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or images.
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may disclose their life through the media or
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on
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the deep web.
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, an
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online blog which is published a report about how
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this
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procuders
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procedures
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many
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who were incents,
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however
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their
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reached
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the media and
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they
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became worried about the community reactions. In conclusion, giving
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government may have benefits
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it leads to
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destroying
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the
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people
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lives in
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the long
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terms
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.
we
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can use a new technology which can keep the personal
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in
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private
while
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can help
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helping
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the
authorites
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authorities
with critical
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.

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planning
Plan your essay with 3 clear ideas: one on the good use of data, one on the bad side, one on a middle view. This helps you keep a clear view.
coherence
Use simple link words to show order and side. Examples: 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example'.
grammar
Write in a calm way. Keep sentences short. Check for misspelt words and fix them.
structure
Make your view clear in the first part. Then add facts. End with a short line that restates your view.
examples
Give a small, real or easy example to back your point.
stance
The writer shows a clear view that privacy is key.
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