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The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graphs
shows
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show
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 different distributions of costs that
people
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 spend on and the areas where the residents live.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the public is more inclined to spend their money on food than
other
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on other
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 categories.
Moreover
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, there are
the
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a
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 large number of
people
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live
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living
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 in Asia. When it comes to money distribution in the world, all of the residents allocate about a quarter
percent
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per cent
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in
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for
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 basic necessary as consuming. The second highest proportion is
the
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apply
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transport, at 18%.
Then
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,
people
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 spend on housing
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account
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accounting
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 for 12%, which is twofold that
used
Verb problem
spent
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in
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on
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 clothing. As for
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the regions
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regions
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region's
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 population, Asia is the most
choice
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popular choice
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 to live,
more
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with more
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 than half
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a percent
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percent
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per cent
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Use synonyms
people
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of people
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consider
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considering
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 as their accommodation, at 57%. There
are
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is
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 the same distribution between
Americas
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the Americas
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 and Europe, with 14% of residents in the world.
Moreover
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, 10% of citizens can be seen in Africa.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • population density
  • global spending
  • basic human needs
  • wellbeing
  • priorities
  • correlate
  • comparison
  • economic development
  • investment
  • nutrition
  • survival needs
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