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The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about world spending and population. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts illustrate the distribution of
world
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 spending across different categories and the
world
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population
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 by region.
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,
it is clear that
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 the largest portion of
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 spending goes to the "Other" category,
while
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 Asia has the biggest share of the
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's
population
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. There are some interesting differences between how the
world
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spend
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 money and where people live. Looking at the first chart, the "Other" category dominated
world
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 spending, which
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 for 40% of the total. Food was the second largest category at 24%, followed by transport at 18%. Housing and clothing made up relatively smaller proportions, at 12% and 6% respectively.
This
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 means that nearly a quarter of all global spending was related to food, making it an important area of expenditure. As for the
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population
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 chart, Asia was home to more than half of the global
population
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, standing at 57%. Europe and the Americas had the same proportion, both at 14%. Africa accounted for 10% of the
world
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population
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, and the remaining 5% was classified as "Other" regions. It is worth
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 that
although
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 Asia contains the majority of the
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's people, the spending chart does not provide a regional breakdown.
Therefore
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, we cannot directly
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 how much Asian countries spend versus European countries.
However
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, the data suggest that food and transport are the most significant spending categories for the
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 as a whole.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • population density
  • global spending
  • basic human needs
  • wellbeing
  • priorities
  • correlate
  • comparison
  • economic development
  • investment
  • nutrition
  • survival needs
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