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Band 2.5

Is forcing students to study hard at school a good idea? Agree or disagree?

To begin
Linking Words
 with, I
believed
Wrong verb form
believe
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 forcing
someone
Use synonyms
it's
Verb problem
is
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 a bad choice
, at
Punctuation problem
. At
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 first , no one
expect
Correct subject-verb agreement
expects
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 to do something
dose
Check wording
they do
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 not like
at
Change preposition
apply
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. especially something about like study .
but
Fix capitalization
But
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 you can do another thing to push students
for
Change preposition
to
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 study.
However
Linking Words
 , Students have more energy and
the
Use the right word
they
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 like to do many things and search
about
Change preposition
for
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it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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.
For example
Linking Words
,
If
Fix capitalization
if
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 you
teacher
Replace the word
teach
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for
Change preposition
apply
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math
you
Punctuation problem
, you
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 can do some challenging
or
Check wording
problems or
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 give them
some
Correct determiner usage
a
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 reward .
and
Fix capitalization
And
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Linking Words
also
Punctuation problem
also,
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 you can show them how much you understand them.
Moreover
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, most
of
Change preposition
apply
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students love people
how
Correct word choice
who
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 respect their thoughts and have a great conversation with them .
young
Fix capitalization
Young
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 people search
about
Change preposition
for
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 themselves
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 they need
someone
Use synonyms
understanding
Verb problem
to understand
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 their feelings. and help them to find themselves and give them compliments about their work .
Additionally
Linking Words
, most
of
Change preposition
apply
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teenagers have pressure
to
Correct word order
from someone to
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someone
Use synonyms
 support them and they can change
from
Correct word order
apply
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themselves for you .
To conclude
Linking Words
, forcing is not necessary
you
Punctuation problem
; you
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 can try to have conversations with them and understand what they want.
Therefore
Linking Words
 , they will study hard just for
someone
Use synonyms
how
Correct word choice
who
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want
Correct subject-verb agreement
wants
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 to show
him
Correct pronoun usage
them
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 something.

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task response
Start with a clear view in the intro, and say why you disagree with forcing. Use one main idea per paragraph.
coherence
Link ideas with simple connect words (first, next, also, but, in addition) to keep flow.
coherence
Give one example for each idea and explain how it helps your view.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Fix mistakes like dose, does, and use commas correctly.
structure
Make each paragraph have one idea: intro, 2 body parts, and a short conclusion.
content
The idea to not force and to use talk and respect is clear.
content
You try to give other ways to help study, like rewards and discussion.
structure
There is a closing line that restates your idea.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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