The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.
The pie charts present the distribution of responses regarding the main sources of happiness among people aged below and over 30.
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, achievement at work was the most common source of happiness in both groups,
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their least cited reasons varied. Looking in more detail, about 31% of people aged under 30 cited work achievements, compared with 32% of those aged over 30. Both age groups
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reported hobbies at nearly the same level, accounting for 22% of younger respondents and 24% of older ones.
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, the proportion of people under 30 who highlighted having a good appearance as a primary factor stood at 18%. A
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15% mentioned travelling, marginally higher than other factors at 14%. Meanwhile, 20% of over-30-year-olds regarded financial security as a reason for their happiness. Another 14% cited being with family as a source, making it the second-lowest figure in the older group after other factors (10%).

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