Some people think living in countryside will have a healthier lifestyle. Some people believe living in city has more health benefits. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that life is precious and we should spend it meaningfully.
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it is a commonly held belief that
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vibrant cities can bring many
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benefits for inhabitants
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, there is
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an argument that living in rural regions better choice for
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a healthy
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environment.
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essay will
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this
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topic from both points of view
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and present my opinion. On one hand, living in modern areas contributes to achieving
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. It is
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possible to say that the quality of life encourages the population there to receive
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public services
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as, easily accessible
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the
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educational system,
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an ideal healthcare
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and
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environment.
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, all of these services can generally reflect on their lifestyle because they have a direct connection to
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their
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culture and situation.
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, some research conducted in distinct cities
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they
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found that living in urban areas
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more
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than suburbs, especially in
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patterns, the proportion of diseases and awareness rates.
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, the citizens who
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to stay in
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the countryside
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they are facing many difficulties in their daily life.
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, a lack of community
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may affect their
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condition
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however
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, they
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are consuming
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natural food
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. Nevertheless
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nevertheless
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,
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insufficient
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providers there,
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lead
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to
increasing infection
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an increase in infectious
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illness
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between
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people.
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, many rural
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people have
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inadequate
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knowledge
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about routine
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, and
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trend may cause many
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complications
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their bodies. In conclusion, there is no easy answer
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question. On balance,
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, I tend to consider that the governments have a vital role among their citizens and should offer
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a healthy
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environment for them.

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task response
Be clear on your view from the start. State your opinion in the intro and restate it in the conclusion.
coherence
Make the plan simple: intro, view one, view two, conclusion. Use easy link words to show order.
examples
Add one or two simple examples for each view to back up your point.
strength
The essay tries to deal with both sides of the issue.
strength
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
strength
Link words like 'on one hand' and 'on the other hand' are used.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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