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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table manifests the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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 in Australia, New Zealand,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, and
United
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the United
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 States in 2003 and 2006.
Additionally
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, the proportions for the four countries in 2006 are
also
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 presented in the
last
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 column.
Overall
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,
United
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the United
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 States boasted the highest figure for the
number
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 of temporary migrant
workers
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of these
workers
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 per 1,000 people was the lowest
due to
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 its considerable population base. On
contrary
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the contrary
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, New Zealand had the fewest temporary migrant
workers
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 both in 2003 and 2006, but the
number
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 took up the highest share among the four countries. In 2003, there were 577,000 temporary migrant
workers
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 in the US, which was the highest compared to the other three nations.
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, the US
also
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 dominated the figure in 2006, which was 678,000
workers
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 in total. As for New Zealand, it unveils that the temporary migrant
workers
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 accounted for the highest percentage, which is a leading figure
according to
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 the table below.
Lastly
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,
although
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 there
are
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were
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 only 4.4 temporary migrant
workers
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 per 1,000 people in 2006 in the UK, its growth rate was
definitly
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definitely
 noticeable. There were 137,000 in 2003 and 266,000 in 2006, which is almost
doubled
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double
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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