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Writing Samples
Band 2

The plans below show a harbour in 2005 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate
the
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William
Harbour
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's important change experienced from 2005 to the presentOverall, the
harbour
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 has been more different facility from 2005 to the present.
Furthermore
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, it
also
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 increases business and entertainment places.
Whereas
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, at the same time, some of the facilities have been recreated, illustrating how the Harbord form business has turned into more tourist
.
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attraction.
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In contrast
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, the
Harbour
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 has now been more developed. At the same time, in the West, it not only increases hotels, but
also
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 Restaurants.
Moreover
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,
at
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 the west it
also
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 increases the Car park and the Dock. The development shows how the
Harbour
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 from Business turns into a tourist
.
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attraction.
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structure
Add a clear overview at the start that says what changed from 2005 to today.
task
Mention main changes with two or three clear points, and use direct facts from the maps (for example, more hotels or new car parks).
grammar
Check grammar and sentence form. Fix verb tense and plural mistakes.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show contrast and compare, such as 'but', 'however', 'also', and 'in addition'.
content
The writer tries to compare the two maps.
coherence
There are some linking words used to join ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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