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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. The only people Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

A number of differences between conditional and full approval drugs.
First,
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to gain full approval, the pharmaceutical entity must present
a
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apply
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clear proof of its drug’s
effectiveness
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effectiveness,
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named
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known
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 as
,
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apply
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 Substantial
evidence
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Evidence
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 of
Effeictivenss
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Effectiveness
 (SEE). A validation that must be undeniable and beyond doubt.
In contrast
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, for those drugs with conditional approval,
however
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, the manufacturer
need
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 only
show
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to show
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 that the drug carries a reasonable expectation of effectiveness (REX).
Moreover
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, conditionally approved drugs
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are bond
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bond
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bound
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 to a finite period for renewal of their licensing
status
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status,
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 followed by a numerical identifier.

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Task response needs more full thought: add more facts, show how the changes work.
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Use clear links to join ideas, such as 'also', 'but', 'however', 'so' to move from one idea to next.
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Fix mistakes in spell and phrase, like 'Effetivenss' and 'bond' to 'bound'.
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Add a short finish that restates the main idea.
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The topic is clear and the idea of difference is set.
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There is a good use of some key terms related to drug rules.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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