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Band 2.5

Some people say that when children under 18 are committing a crime they should be punished, while others believe they should be educated. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion.

The pharmaceutical entity is obligated to present the necessary files to prove that their drug has an active progress toward proving the Substantial
evidence
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 of
Effeictivenss
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Efficacy
 (SEE) for full approval. The
evidence
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, in truth, is composite. It includes, but is not limited to, the following
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 pilot data in target species, the extrapolation of effectiveness from other species or related diseases or related dosage forms,
studies
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 from published literature, or foreign
studies
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. In my opinion, these
studies
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 do not absolutely conflict with the drug being effective and safe, even if they include data
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from
studies
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 of other drugs. The aim is to expiate the approval of a drug to treat
contentions
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conditions
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 that require therapy in an urgent manner. The attributes of
evidence
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 that support full approval are several.
First,
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such
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evidence
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 needs to be gathered through
studies
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 conducted
according to
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 Good Clinical Practice. A second characteristic of
this
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evidence
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 is that it should include a group for comparison.
Moreover
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, the study ought to be
double blinded
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.
Furthermore
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, it is important that the primary effectiveness variables are predefined, so that the drug’s efficacy is
measures
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 and proven beyond doubt.
Finally
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, the paper shows that the
prove
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proof
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 must be a statistically significant
differences
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difference
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 between
tested
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the tested
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 groups.

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task response
Make a clear view in the first line. Add a short ending that repeats your view.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit. Put ideas in 2 or 3 short parts.
grammar
Fix form and word use. Use easy words and spell common words right.
content
Add more facts from the text you use, with clear examples that fit.
task response
The topic is clear and you speak on the right side.
coherence
You give ideas that fit the topic, like the need for good practice and stats.
vocabulary
You show you know some terms used in this field.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • juvenile offenders
  • deterrent
  • retribution
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • reintegration
  • psychological impacts
  • preventative measures
  • correctional facilities
  • restorative justice
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