The graph and table below give information about the percentage of graduates who worked full-time after university and their average salary in Australia from 2004 to 2012.

The graph and table below give information about the percentage of graduates who worked full-time after university and their average salary in Australia from 2004 to 2012.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph and table below give information about the percentage of graduates who worked full-time after university and their average salary in Australia from 2004 to 2012.
The table illustrates the
number
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of
math
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students compared to other majors who got a full-time job after graduation between 2004 to 2012 in Australia. The chart
also
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depicts their income in each
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. From the
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it can be seen that the
number
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of
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Mathematics
graduates did not change that much as the line stayed nearly constant for eight years in a row. The total estimation is said to be around 76 to 80
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.
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, there was a rise in the non-
math
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user numbers between 2004 to 2006
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the percentage increased from 55 to 80.
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,
this
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rise did not
last
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and
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it started to fall in the next six years.
As a result
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, the
number
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of people who finished
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university
in
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2008 to 2012 and whose major was not
math
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,
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were
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less than
math
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students.
Furthermore
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, the average salary of both
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and non-
math
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experts
have
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has
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increased
as
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over
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the
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time went by.
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number
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was similar in both
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groups
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in the first four
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year
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years
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.
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,
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the gap rose after the
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2008 and resulted in experts
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math
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-related
occupation
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occupations
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to earn
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around 56000 in 2012.
In contrast
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, the total income of other professions was about 51000
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dollars
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in the same
year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, math, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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