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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas to live in cities. What problems can this cause, and how can these problems be solved?

It is often argued that these days, many
people
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 leave their villages to live in
cities
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 since living in
cities
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 is more comfortable than living in the countryside. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss why
people
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 are moving out of their rural
areas
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and
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 I will try to solve the problem. One major problem is that in villages there are fewer opportunities than in
cities
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.
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, fewer learning centres,
universities
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, and jobs are
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. The
government
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 is always focused on
cities
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 to improve tourism.
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, it makes a lot of income. Many residents dream of living in urban
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as well as
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 studying at famous
universities
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.
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, in the UK, the capital city of London, other citizens want to
study
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 their
universities
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 for the reason that
people
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 who
study
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 in the best
universities
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 UK because these
universities
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 of
people
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 find
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high-salaried companies like Apple, Samsung, BMW, and Mercedes . If the
government
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 pay attention to the rural
areas
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, constructs new huge
universities
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 and provides master's degrees in various subjects, inhabitants will not leave their homes and will reside in the
village
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.
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, another major issue that house facilities,
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, electricity, water, warm conditions, latest technology and
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 devices. In citizens' life is wonderful ; they have everything to live latest technology and water ,
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 as in Uzbekistan, the capital of Tashkent. In September , residents come to Tashkent to
study
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 since the
village
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 does not have
universities
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. There are always traffic jams in the autumn.
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, the
government
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 need to provide new flats in the
village
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. In summary,
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 living in
cities
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 makes life easier because of living with the latest technology.
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 to building beneficial learning centres for residents. In my opinion, the
government
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 should focus on rural
areas
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 to build new buildings and provide the latest technologies. It may be solved by moving from the
village
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 for
study
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 or work.

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structure
Organise into clear paragraphs: introduction, body, and a short conclusion.
content
State the problem first and then give clear steps to fix it. Use simple, real life examples.
vocabulary
Use simple words and short sentences to ease reading.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Use correct verb forms and noun/plural forms.
coherence
Do not add far facts. Stay on topic and use linking words to join ideas.
linking
Link ideas with words like first, also, but, so, therefore.
idea
The writer starts by naming the topic and wants to fix it.
structure
There is a plan to fix issues, which shows focus on task.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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