The pie charts below give information about what young people in Australia did after leaving secondary school in 1980, 1990 and 2000.

The pie charts below give information about what young people in Australia did after leaving secondary school in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below give information about what young people in Australia did after leaving secondary school in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
The three pie charts compare the choices made by young
people
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in Australia after finishing secondary school in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the proportion of school leavers who entered employment increased dramatically throughout the period,
while
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the percentages of those who pursued
further
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education or remained unemployed showed a slight decline. In 1980, the highest proportion of young
people
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was unemployed, at exactly 50 per
cent
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,
while
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those who were employed accounted for 40 per
cent
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. The remaining 10 per
cent
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chose to continue with future education. These proportions showed a noticeable change after ten years.
For instance
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, the percentage of teenagers who were unemployed fell dramatically from 50 per
cent
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to 38 per
cent
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.
However
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, the figure for young
people
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who had a job showed a slight increase, reaching 50 per
cent
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, and the share of teenagers who selected
further
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study rose marginally to 2 per
cent
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.
In addition
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, the share of employed young
people
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continued to rise gradually,
whereas
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the figures for both unemployment and future education dropped noticeably in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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