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The development of tourism cintributed to english becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to english becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advanvtage and disadvantages to hvaing one language in the world.

Due to
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 the increasing trend of tourism,
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english
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English
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 becomes the most prominent
language
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 around the globe. It is often asserted that,
due to
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this
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 trend,
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english
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English
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 would become the only
language
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 spoken
at
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worldwide.
Although
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 having a common
language
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 makes communication easy, it
also
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 presents a few drawbacks
such
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lost
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 of unique cultures and traditions.
One
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 of the most significant
benefit
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benefits
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 of
this
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phenomina
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phenomenon
 is convenient communication. A
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single
language
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 helps in making communication
effectively
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 without any disruption or hesitation.
Such
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 a
language
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 not only helps countries to work collectively at
global
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the global
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 level but
also
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 provides
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 employment opportunities to youngsters , which eventually boosts the economy. To exemplify, if there were no common
language
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, it would not
feasible
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be feasible
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 for businesses to collaborate with each other.
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, it is quite important in
education
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the education
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 sector to have a common
language
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, as it helps to gather information from all over the world and transcript it into
one
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language
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 so that everyone can understand.
Such
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 efforts not only spread education with equality but
also
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 bridge the gap between communities.
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 a
language
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 makes
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it
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convenient to deliver messages globally,
prefering
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preferring
 only
one
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language
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 can vanish several cultures and traditions. Since a
language
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 is the only way to connect future generations with ancient legacy, avoiding it can become the
extiction
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extinction
 of particular traditional and cultural values.
For example
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,
study
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a study
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 conducted in Canada suggested that
due to
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 the adoption of
English
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,
majority of the
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the majority of
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canadian's
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Canada's
upcoming generation are not aware of their native
language
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.
As a result
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, they are not familiar with their history and culture as well.
Hence
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, speaking only
one
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language
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 can fade
history
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the history
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 and cultures of
the
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a
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 particular nation. In conclusion,
while
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 speaking
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english
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English
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 alongside
native
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a native
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language
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 has several significant benefits
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such
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, such
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 as
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widening
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 job opportunities and knowledge, only speaking it can have
serious
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a serious
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 impact on cultural values.

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coherence and cohesion
In coherence and cohesion, arrange one main idea in each paragraph. Use simple linking words like and, but, also. Make ideas flow to the next.
structure
Clear form with intro, body and end.
content strength
Includes both sides of the issue and some examples.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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