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With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smartphones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I do agree that
tecnology
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technological
 advancement is developing way
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faster than what people projected several years ago. It felt blessing in disguise living my
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 years in
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 modern era of communication technology. Technology
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 days
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 everyone away from home to connect better with their loved ones, closing their distance though miles away physically. The other side of the story, smartphones, tablets and other mobile devices give distance to
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 who are close physically. As a conservative family born and raised that lived far away from my family in out of town,
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give
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the best experience, if I could tell. Family members are dragged into their own gadgets in every
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, every dinner, or any other family
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, making me feel there are gaps between all of us that
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 more distance day by day.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. State your view in one line at the start.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a main idea, then add simple details.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, also, then to show flow.
content
Give one clear example that supports your point.
grammar
Check word form and basic spelling so the meaning stays clear.
idea
You state your view clearly in parts.
style
You share a personal example from life.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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