The graph below shows the number of shops that closed

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of shops that closed and the

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of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. It can be seen in the graph that the

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of businesses opened has decreased heavily from 2011 to

2012

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from around 8500

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to 4000

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.

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from 2012 to

2014

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is a slight rise in

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number

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the number

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of business

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. Unfortunately, from 2014 to

2018

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2018,

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the

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of store

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only

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to decrease from 6000

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to 3000

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. Meanwhile, the

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of stores closing

remain

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relatively constant around 6500 closures

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however

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however,

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from 2014 to

2016

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the

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of store closures...