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reasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own pourer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

The migration of skilled professionals from poorer
countries
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 to developed nations has become a global trend.
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this
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 movement offers
individual
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individuals
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 a better opportunity, it
also
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 creates serious
problem
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problems
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 for the
countries
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 they leave behind. In
this
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 essay, I will analyse the problem and suggest a potential solution. One major problem is that poor
countries
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 often suffer from a shortage of skilled
workers
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. If many professionals,
such
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 as doctors and
teachers
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, leave to work in richer nations, the services at home will become weaker.
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, if a large number of doctors move abroad, hospitals may not have enough staff to take care of patients properly, and healthcare systems become weaker, making public health at risk.
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, when experienced
teachers
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 emigrate, the quality of education reduces, affecting the future development of the nation.
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, local people will not receive good healthcare or education, and the country’s development will be held back. A possible solution is for
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the government
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 to improve salaries, working conditions, and career development opportunities to keep skilled
workers
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.
Teachers
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 and doctors should receive enough pay to support their families and feel respected for their work.
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, if
teachers
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 get fair wages and schools have better resources, they will be more likely to stay and continue contributing to their country.
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, by offering good pay and conditions, governments can motivate skilled
workers
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 to remain, which will help improve the country in the long term. In conclusion, the loss of skilled professionals creates serious challenges for poorer
countries
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, especially in healthcare and education.
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, by improving salaries and working conditions, governments can encourage talented
workers
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 to stay and contribute to their own nation’s progress.

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task
Add more detail on how to fix the problem with clear steps. Give at least two specific ideas that the government or people can use, not just a general plan.
coherence
Use linking words to make ideas fit together. Start each paragraph with a topic idea and end with a link to the next one.
structure
Make the introduction tell what you will talk about and the conclusion restates the main idea.
content
Give one or two extra examples or numbers to back up the points.
language
Check spelling and use simple, common words to keep the writing easy to read.
content
The issue is clear and the goal is present.
structure
The essay has a real plan with intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Examples such as doctors and teachers are used.
solution
The fix is simple and easy to understand (pay and conditions).
tone
Tone fits a test task.

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