People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less.

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drink
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that
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keep buying is
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sugar based
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drinks
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. Whenever the situation is, a
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that tastes sweet is the
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perfect option to buy, yet consuming too much
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can cause serious health problems. Where the government must intervene in
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health concern. Nowadays
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drinks
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become
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popular among all
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, whether they are a kid or
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age to buy
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drink
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is
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a teenager. So
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is the reason for
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trend of sweet taste? There are many factors.
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, the
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packaging, the vast majority of brands that sell sweet
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, apparently
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visuals to make
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see and buy their product.
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many brands sell that
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a lower price,
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cheap price
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and
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option when
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some
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are thirsty and need a refreshing
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because the name is a sugary
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people
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find it easy to like it
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is the most flavour
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easy to like for children to adults
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sometimes they call it a delightful
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.
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,
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the
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and ingredients that are in
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sugar
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drinks
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can trigger diabetes
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moreover
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, these days
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, kids
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who are under 10 years old often consume sweet
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can lead to health concerns in the future.
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the government and society need to work together.
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, making a label with the
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level for each
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to
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a concern about the high
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in the
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.

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task response
Task response: Be clear. State your main idea at the start and add two or three strong reasons with simple facts. Give a clear plan or solution as well.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use a clear path. Have a short intro, then reasons, then a ending. Use linking words like first, next, also, but. Make paragraphs and not too long sentences.
content
The essay keeps to the topic of sugar drinks and health.
solution
It gives a real idea for a solution, like a sugar label on drinks.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sugar-based
  • drinks
  • taste
  • refreshing
  • enjoyable
  • marketing
  • advertise
  • cool
  • desirable
  • energy
  • tired
  • boost
  • social events
  • gatherings
  • parties
  • celebrations
  • choose
  • quick
  • common
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