The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart compares the percentage of Australian men and women in different
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groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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, females in the 45 to 54
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had the highest
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and in the female
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of 65 and over
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had the least proportion.
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, male has the highest
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in the 15 to 24
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and the least proportion was in the 35 to 44
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. It was
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that the female
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kept an upward trend until
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the 45 to 54
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group
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, increasing from 47.7
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to 53.3
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. In the female
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of
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55 to 64 , it
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roughly remained the
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same
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proportion, but turning to the 65 and over
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, which declined significantly from 53
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to 47.1
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. Turning to the male
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, the 15 to 24
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group
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reached the peak at the beginning, which was 52.8 and
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dramatically dropped to 39.5 in the 35 to 44
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at the bottom in all records. Surprisingly, the male
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subsequently
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kept an upward trend from 39.5
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to 46.7
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from the 35 to 44
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group
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to the
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of 65 and over.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, percentages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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