The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian
men
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and
women
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in six age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 In
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general,
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women
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were more active than
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in almost all age groups except the youngest
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. The
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difference between the two genders was the biggest in middle
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age,
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when
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had much higher numbers than
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For people aged 15 to 24
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did a little more exercise than
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But from 25 to 64
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were always ahead The clearest gap was in the 35 to 44 group when over half of
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were active
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only about two out of five
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joined in The same situation appeared in the 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 groups where
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stayed above
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by several points
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in the oldest
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group,
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people aged 65 and over
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, the
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two genders were almost the same
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, with
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only a very small difference

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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