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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons.

Dear Accommodation Officer, I hope
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 request a single room next term. My name is Fagbenro Adekunbi Amaka. I am a data analyst and reside at 22 Pavilion Suite with my roommate , Josh . The apartment itself is an excellent place to live in , with a pleasant view of the ocean
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and close proximity to the train station. Unfortunately, the behaviour of my flatmate has made living conditions very challenging. Josh frequently invites his friends late at night, which results in loud noise that disturbs my work and affects my productivity.
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, the constant parties organised by him were where there was loud music, smoking and drug usage in the house.
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, the regular usage of my items without my permission has caused me a lot of trouble at work.
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 Wednesday, Josh took my laptop to his friend's place , which caused me to lose an important client and nearly put my job at risk. Admittedly, I have tried different measures to address the issue,
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 as wearing earplugs, speaking with him directly, and keeping my door locked, but none of these have resolved the problem. For these reasons, I kindly request to be moved to a single bedroom. I strongly believe that a single bedroom will provide me
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 necessary privacy and security to focus on work and private life. I would be grateful if younconsider my request and arrange suitable accommodation for me. Thank you for your time and understanding
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I look forward to your positive response Best wishes, Adekunbi Fagbenro

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structure
Break long sentences into shorter ones to help the reader follow your point.
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Split some paragraphs so one idea is in each paragraph.
grammar
Check spelling and caps to improve accuracy and formality.
vocabulary
Use simple words and avoid hard phrases; this fits IELTS top 100 word rule.
content
Keep only the facts about the issue and what you want to change.
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Clear request for a single room.
tone
Polite opening and closing.
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Gives specific examples of problems affecting work.
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Shows steps taken to solve the issue.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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