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The graph shows how many exports were from Autralia to 4 other countries between 1990 and 2012.

The graph shows how many exports were from Autralia to 4 other countries between 1990 and 2012.
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, the number of exports increased in Japan, China and India,
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While
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,
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apply
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 it decreased in the USA. In terms of statistics of China was 3% in 1990.
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Afterward
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 it rose quickly to 27%
until
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 2012. Turning to
the
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Japan
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Japan,
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 it was
initially
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 25% in 1990. After one
year
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year,
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 followed by a slight growth to 27% and
then
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 it started falling considerably to 19% in 2012. Regarding
to
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India
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India,
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 it was just 3% in 1990. There was a
slightly
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 rise
aproximately
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approximately
 to 8% in 2009.
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this
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climb
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 it dropped to 4% in 2012.
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, the US
it
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was 11% in 1990. It experienced a substantial decline to 7% in 1995. Later, it restored its
previously
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about
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 11% in 1999.
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, it plunged slowly to 5% in 2012.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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