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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree? Find essays with the same topic

In the modern era,
ndwpapers
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newspapers
 and television
news
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 programs have
impact
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an impact
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for
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on
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 many people. In my opinion, most
of
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apply
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people find many choices
from
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in
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news
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the news
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.
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, in
2019
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2019,
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 on television
news
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 shows man who
help
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helps
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 children from fire danger. Because
that
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so
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 many companies give him jobs and
chinese
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 to be
influencer
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an influencer
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 .
Moreover
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, Most of
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news
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the news
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improve
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improves
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the
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apply
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mental health and
help
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helps
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 teenagers to
open
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be
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minded
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open-minded
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 about dangerous things.
Additionally
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, newspapers have
powerful
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the power
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 to change the world,
such
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 as country
have
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goes to
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 war the humans will
be
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apply
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understande
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understand
 and start to fight their governments.
To conclude
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,
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and television
news
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helpful
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are helpful
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 to understand each other and have many chances to improve our world .

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task response
State your view clearly at the start. The writing now has no clear stance. Add one main idea and keep it as your plan for the essay. Give one or two simple examples to back this view. End with a short conclusion that repeats your view.
coherence cohesion
Build your essay in three parts. Start with your view, say why you think this, and finish with a short closing. Use linking words like First, Then, Also, But, So. Put one idea in each sentence and keep a small number of ideas.
language use
Work on the English form. Many rules are not used well. Fix spell errors like 'newspapers', 'open-minded', and 'influencer'. Use simple grammar and short sentences. Check subject-verb and tense.
lexical resource
Choose common, easy words. Do not use hard words. Do not repeat words too much. Try to rest some ideas with small changes.
content examples
Give one or two real but simple examples that show a point. The examples should match the view you take. Do not use facts that are not true or not clear.
strength
The writer has some idea that news can affect people.
effort
The writer tries to use an example or two.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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