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Some people think that the main aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Science
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 should be used to make people’s lives better, and I totally agree with
this
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 statement. Many individuals who suffered from chronic diseases were cured by the help of
science
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, resulting in spreading joy and
relif
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relief
 to the ones
that
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who
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praied
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prayed
 for their health.
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,
science
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also
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 developed technologies like AI, which
made
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have made
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life
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 more convenient.
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, it opened the doors for the creation of new devices that help humans in daily
life
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.
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,
science
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 has been used in wars, which causes unpredictable damage that has a negative impact on humans, animals and the environment.
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 side of
science
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 shows that its use can sometimes harm
life
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instead
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 of improving it.
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, despite these risks, I strongly believe that
science
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 is mainly a tool for good if used wisely. The main aim of
science
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 should be to enhance the quality of
life
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 for people, not to destroy it. In conclusion,
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science
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 can be misused in harmful ways, I agree that its true purpose is to make human
life
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 better. It brings health, convenience, and innovation that benefit society as a whole.

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task response
Say your view clearly in the first line and keep to it.
coherence
Use simple joining words to move from one idea to the next.
examples
Add one or two real and short examples to back up each point.
content
Your view is clear that science should help life.
content
You give ideas on health and new tech that show the good side of science.
structure
The essay has three parts and a closing line.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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