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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The line graph presents book expenditure in four countries from 1995 to 2005, measured in millions of US dollars.
Overall
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, each country experienced an increase by the final year,
whereas
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 Germany consistently recorded the largest figures throughout the period. In Germany, the amount of money spent on books rose from 80
million
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 in 1995 to 90
million
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 in 1999.
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this
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 figure dropped modestly to 85
million
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 by 2003, it recovered to about 95
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 in 2005.
By comparison
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, book expenditure in
French
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 remained the second largest, rising to nearly 70 in 2001 and
then
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 to around 75 in 2005. Meanwhile, the figure for Italy fluctuated between 1995 and 1999, ranging from 50 to 55
million
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. It
then
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 showed an upward trend in the remaining years, reaching just over 60 in 2005. As for Austria, expenditure on books climbed from 30
million
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 in the initial year to 40
million
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 by 1999 before remaining steady in 2001, making it the lowest among the four nations.
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, it surpassed Italy to reach 60 in 2003 and grew
further
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 to more than 70 by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • correlation
  • digital reading platforms
  • socio-economic factors
  • initiatives
  • cultural influence
  • statistical data
  • purchasing habits
  • book industry
  • consumer spending
  • educational resources
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