In some countries, there are not enough medical or educational facilities in rural areas. Therefore, some people believe newly graduated teachers and doctors should be sent to work in rural areas for some time. Others think that people should be free to choose where they work after graduation. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

An inequality between rural
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and urban
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has become a common issue globally in recent years, especially in healthcare and educational
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. Some
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argue that those who
newly
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in the fields of education and healthcare should
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in rural
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for a certain period of time,
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others argue that they should be granted freedom to choose
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location after graduation.
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the main factors explaining why
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are not particularly interested in working in rural
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, accompanied by relevant examples. On the one hand, those who support newly graduated doctors and teachers working in underdeveloped regions argue that those
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lack educational institutions and healthcare services. Assigning the medical personnel and educators there can help the village residents
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gain broader access to these services.
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, the services in remote
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remain unequal if only new graduates are assigned there without the guidance of experts. To illustrate, there are many cases in the outermost
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where the doctors have misdiagnosed their
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due to
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a combination of incompetence and lack of
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.
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, they do not receive accurate medical treatment, leading to high mortality rates.
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, many
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think that doctors and teachers should be able to choose their
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location after graduation. The major factor
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medical personnel and educators not interested in working in rural
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is the lack of basic
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. There are numerous instances
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their homes are located miles away from their workplace
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public transportation is not available.
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, they must have private vehicles to be able to travel more easily.
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is compounded by the fact that they generally do not receive salaries commensurate with their workload and the conditions in the village.
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, I agree that the remote area should have equal
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the city.
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,
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should not blame educators and health workers who do not want to
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there if the
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do not improve. The government should provide basic
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in the disadvantaged
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as well as
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the metropolitan
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. It can increase the life expectancy and quality of indigenous
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.

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Task Response
State your view clearly in the introduction and repeat it in the conclusion so the reader knows your position from the start.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make each paragraph focus on one main idea and use clear links to the next part to help the flow of your essay.
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Use stronger, more precise examples and explain why they matter to the point you make.
Grammar
Check for long, run‑on sentences and fix awkward phrasing to improve clarity.
Structure
Clear structure with introduction, body, and conclusion
Content
Shows both sides and a clear view
Coherence
Good use of linking phrases like 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand'

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