Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the cause? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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last
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few years
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people
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, people
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have
more
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become more
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interested in travelling around the world
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, no
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matter their age or social status. In fact,
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recent
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the
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number
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of
travelers
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travellers
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has increased considerably
due to
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the desire of learning about the
culture
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, food, architecture and
history
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of the countries and meeting new
people
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.
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, there are benefits of
traveling
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travelling
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such
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as strengthening social skills, independence, facing fears and valuing
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who
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we are and
we
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what we
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have. Nowadays, the idea to know more about our world, visit its landmarks, learn about its
history
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and its
culture
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has motivated
to
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apply
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the
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people
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to travel
especially
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, especially
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abroad
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, by
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themselves or with anyone.
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, through
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travelling
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traveling
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traveling,
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people
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can meet
another
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others
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who let them establish new relationships
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matter the place that they visit. Considering my own experience, I truly believe that when I went to Australia
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for
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instance, I could
know
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get to know
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a place deeply, its beautiful landscapes, its kind
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and its quiet lifestyle. In my case, I wanted to experience what
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it means
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living abroad with my boyfriend, assuming my responsibilities at home, buying
by myself my food
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my food by myself
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, working hard to pay my bills
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, doing
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other
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another
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kind of job that I used to do in Colombia and improving my English level. But
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what are the benefits of
traveling
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travelling
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? Studies suggest that
people
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like me who enjoy visiting different countries, get
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emotional
, social and cognitive skills.
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, when I travelled to Australia, I
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that I
am
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able to do a lot of things that in Colombia I didn't do
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as cooking, looking for a flat considering my
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budget, working as a cleaner, studying English and taking care of household chores at the same time.
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, I learned to save money to visit cities as Sidney, Melbourne and Perth because I was really interested in knowing how Australians live, getting new knowledge about their
culture
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, cuisine,
history
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and architecture. After living in
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Australia,
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I would say I am more confident, I could get over my insecurities, face my fears and deal
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anxiety
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, and
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now, for
me
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me,
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it is easier to meet
people
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and start a conversation with them in English, which is related to
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making
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cognitive progress.
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, travelling is really important for us in order to strengthen our emotional, social and cognitive skills. Our desire
of knowing
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to know
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new places is because it
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gives
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us more information about their
culture
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,
history
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, cuisine and architecture in
a
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an
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enjoyable experience where
in
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, in
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real
time
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time,
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we can get our own experiences of learning.

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grammar
Fix small grammar mistakes and spelling to avoid lost meaning (for example 'emotionals' should be 'emotional', 'Sidney' is 'Sydney'). Use simpler sentences to keep meaning clear.
cohesion
Use clearer links between ideas. Start each paragraph with a main idea sentence and use simple words like 'also', 'but', 'so' to show how ideas go together.
task
Explain more why travel grows. Mention cost, easy tickets, tech, and more free time as reasons.
content
The essay shows a real idea and uses a personal example from your life.
structure
There is a clear end that restates the main idea.

Word Count

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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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