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In the last century when a human astronaut first arrived on the Moon he said: “It is a big step for mankind”. But some people think it makes little difference to our daily life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The hypothesis aimed to reveal how β2AR and its Gs protein move through shifting conformations. As the authors put it,” we sought to
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 by cryo-EM the transition of conformational ensembles”. Their rationale was to bridge a gap in structural studies and,
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, to capture fleeting intermediates along
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 pathway. They argued that
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 selectivity and evaluate the effects of drugs with distinct efficacies and potencies”, they say.

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State your view clearly on the topic. The task asks if you agree or not. Start with a short line that shows your view.
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Give reasons that back your view. Use simple ideas and keep to the task.
coherence
Make the ideas linked. Use small links like 'first', 'then', 'but', 'also', 'in short'.
coherence
Put the plan in your mind. Use a clear para for each main idea. End with a short finish.
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Keep to the task. Do not talk about things not asked.
content
The topic is real and a clear aim is visible in the text.
lexicon
Some terms from science are used to hold the idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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