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Some people believe that social media has had a negative impact on society, while others argue that it has brought about positive changes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The study did not conceal its limitations. The authors acknowledged that,” given the small subunit size β2AR and its associated heterotrimeric Gs protein, it is inherently very challenging to obtain
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 information of dissociation products by cryo-EM. They
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 pointed out that some questions call for approaches
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 able to capture faster kinetics.
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 to, techniques
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 as ligand spraying or the laser-triggered release of caged ligands. At the same time, they suggested that certain systems might be better served by more advanced tools, cryoSPARC 3DFlex among them.

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Weakness
Task response is not clear. The text talks about a lab study, not the task. State the task and give your view.
Structure
Make a simple plan. Start with what you will talk about, then give your points, and end with your view.
Content
Add more points and give one small example for each so you show how you think.
Content
Some good try to give detail in parts of the text.
Vocabulary
The study words like limit and kinetics are used in a real way.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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