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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given plan outlines the transformation of the Beechwood
Farm
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 from 1950 to the present.
Overall
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, the Beechwood
Farm
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 has undergone significant changes.
Although
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 it has always been situated between a river and an avenue, it has evolved from a simple
farm
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 into a more complex functional
area
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. The most significant change is that the
area
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 previously used for grazing has been replaced by solar panels, parks, and a camping field.
In addition
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, holiday cottages and
farm
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 shops have been added here, allowing tourism in
this
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area
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 to develop
further
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. In 1950, the Beechwood
Farm
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 was a peaceful and well-structured space with several key factors. In the
west
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, there was a clearly
categorized
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area
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 for cultivation, including fruit trees, soft fruits, and vegetables. In the north, there was a large
area
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 for sheep grazing. The farmhouse, barn, and chicken-rearing
area
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—these more domestic areas—were located in the southeast corner. Up to now, the function of some areas has changed, but part of it still retains the appearance it had in 1950. The layout of the cultivation
area
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 has remained consistent with that in 1950.
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, the location of the barn has changed, and leisure and holiday areas have been added, allowing tourism to develop.
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, the infrastructure in
this
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area
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 has been improved:
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and the
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 tracks have been converted into main roads, facilitating transport.

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task
You show good main ideas and clear change from 1950 to today. Add a short overall line at the start and end to make the big idea clear.
coherence
Link ideas with clear flow. Use simple words to show order, like 'first', 'then', 'now' and 'also'.
language
Check for small grammar and keep words in easy, plain form. This helps to be easy to read.
content
Good use of time points 1950 and today to show change.
content
Clear change with detail such as new use like solar panels and shops.

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