Advertising aimed at children should be banned. To what extend do youagree or disagree? to what extend do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own know ledge and experience

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think should be ban advertising aimed at children
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should be banned becouse
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advertising
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children need
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advertising
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advertising
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task response
State your clear view at once and keep it. Tell if you agree or not with a ban and why in 2 or 3 small ideas.
task response
Give a simple example for each idea and grow the idea in a small space.
coherence cohesion
Use one idea per paragraph. Have a short intro and a short ending.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words like first, next, and also, but, finally to join ideas.
structure
The essay tries to give both sides.
structure
There is a clear end line that sums up the view.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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