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Some people believe that robots are very important for the future of human development, while others believe that they are dangerous and have a negative impact on society. Discuss both perspectives and give your opinion.

Robots
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 have become a significant topic of debate in recent years. Some people argue that
robots
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 are useful in our
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,
whereas
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 others believe they have drawbacks
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future development. In my opinion,
robots
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 have both advantages and disadvantages.
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, I strongly believe that the merits outweigh the demerits. On the one hand,
robots
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 create a wide variety of benefits.
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, using
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 in industries
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increase
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 productivity.
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other words,
robots
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 in factories reduce human error and save time.
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,
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 can work 24/7 without rest or sleep, unlike humans need breaks to recharge themselves.
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, increase productivity.
Secondly
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, they can support
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 in a much better way.
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, we can use
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 in exploration
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 as deep-sea and space.
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 has led to
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 people from risks.
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, they enhance
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 and
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 development.
On the other hand
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, there are
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 negative consequences.
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 on
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 may reduce social communications.
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, increase
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in unemployment
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. To illustrate,
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overdependence
 on
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 leads to loss
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of jobs
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.
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, loss
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of safety
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society
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. In conclusion, reports can have
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a negative
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 impact on
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, but
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have
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also
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 many advantages. Personally, I think the benefits of
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 more
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 dangers.
However
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, we should use
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 to expand
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 and
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society
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 development.

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organization
Make your point clear in each paragraph with one idea per paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and contrast.
content
Give one or two real examples to back up ideas.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling to fix common errors.
task response
End with a clear personal view tied to your ideas.
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The essay shows the idea of both sides and gives an opinion.
coherence
There is a structure with On the one hand and On the other hand.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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