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Language teachers should concentrate on giving positive feedback to students when they do good work, rather than on criticising bad work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people said that linguistic teachers should provide positive evaluation when their
students
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 accomplish good work, rather than focusing on negative feedback.
However
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, I believe that the idea of constructive criticism is an important factor in the learning
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, as it enhances the understanding of the
student
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,
in addition
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 to
it
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 cognitive abilities. On
one
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 hand, constructive feedback can strengthen the understanding of the concept to the
students
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,
also
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 it can
also
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 develop their cognitive skills. When a
student
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 gets a helpful critique and tips from his professor, he will start to understand his mistakes
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 and how to prevent them in the future.
As a result
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, that will improve his way of thinking.
For instance
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, scientists conducted an experiment on two groups of
students
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 by examining each
one
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 of them. The first group had a constructive teacher.
While
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 the second group had a teacher who praised them every time they did good work. After comparing them, they noticed that the first
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 was better and faster,
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 of the advice from their teacher.
On the other hand
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, commendation on
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 can be beneficial in motivating
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students
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to continue learning. When the educator commends on
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 success, the
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 of the
student
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 produces a new chemical reaction that causes joy and comfort .
Consequently
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، it will help them to continue the
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 of learning as
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process
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 becomes fun and worthwhile.
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, scientists observed the activity of the
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 when someone is being commended, and they saw that the commendation causes the
brain
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 to expand and become faster. In conclusion, beneficial criticism and the Applauding
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 can be a good thing, if it happens in the right manner, as productive evaluation can refine the abilities of the
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,
as well as
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 the applauding
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, as it may boost
one
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's mood and
feeling
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.

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planning
Make your view clear from the first line and keep it clear to the end.
development
Use one or two good examples and explain how they prove your idea.
linking
Link ideas with simple words and use clear cause and result in your sentences.
organization
Good try to use a two side view with 'On one hand' and 'On the other hand'.
content
There are clear ideas on how positive and negative feedback can help.
effort
Some examples are given to show ideas and this shows effort.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentrate on
  • positive feedback
  • good work
  • criticising
  • bad work
  • motivate
  • boost confidence
  • discourage
  • demotivate
  • identify strengths
  • build on
  • overwhelming
  • hinder
  • progress
  • balance
  • effective teaching
  • encourage
  • take risks
  • think creatively
  • fear of failure
  • hesitation
  • positive learning environment
  • demoralize
  • negative atmosphere
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