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Language teachers should concentrate on giving positive feedback to students when they do good work, rather than on criticising bad work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In general, most people dislike
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 and prefer to ignore their own mistakes.
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, sometimes things we do not like can be more beneficial than we think. I partially agree with the idea that
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 criticism can be efficient and effective for the student’s level. Imagine that a
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 told you to write an essay, and the
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’s
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 did not include any errors that you made,
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 the essay was full of mistakes.
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 would make you think that you are perfect in writing and that you do not need any improvement or
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, giving real
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 to the student, by telling him all the mistakes he made, and whether his essay was good or bad, would show a sharp increase in the student’s level.
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,
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 is an important skill that every
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 should have and develop.
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this
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 skill can be effective in a positive
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 or a negative
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, some teachers use a very bad
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 to give
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 as embarrassing students in front of their classmates, using bad language, and in some countries
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, the
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 should be cautious in
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 approach.
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,
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 is a very sensitive approach. If a
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, the development would be clear within days.
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, using it in a bad
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 could lead to depression and a sharp fall in the student’s level.
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, a balance between constructive criticism and positive
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 is essential for effective learning.

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task-response
State a clear view in the intro and keep it. Provide 2 or 3 clear points with simple examples.
coherence
Use one clear idea per paragraph. Start each paragraph with a short line about its main idea. Use simple links to move from one idea to the next.
language
Use small, short sentences. Use common words from simple list. Check grammar and word choice slowly.
content
Clear stance that you partly agree.
cohesion
Use of linking words like However and Therefore.
structure
Balanced view and ending with balance.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentrate on
  • positive feedback
  • good work
  • criticising
  • bad work
  • motivate
  • boost confidence
  • discourage
  • demotivate
  • identify strengths
  • build on
  • overwhelming
  • hinder
  • progress
  • balance
  • effective teaching
  • encourage
  • take risks
  • think creatively
  • fear of failure
  • hesitation
  • positive learning environment
  • demoralize
  • negative atmosphere
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