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The bar chart shows information about the favourite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows information about the favourite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how much
does
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apply
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2 middle
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school
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schools
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 differ
about
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in
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 their approval rate for 4 different subjects .
Overall
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, sports in
school
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 A
registerd
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registered
 the highest
amount
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 of crowd,
where as
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whereas
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science
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 and social
science
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 accounted for the least
amount
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 of
votes
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 respectively, and the other 2
catagories
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categories
 being
reletively
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relatively
 close to each other. In terms of sports in
school
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 A, physical activites maximized the
amount
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 of
votes
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 by 36
votes
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,
in contrast
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 to
school
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 B recording only 5
votes
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, with a 31 vote difference,
however
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, languages and crafting\drowing was particially the same, with 1 vote difference i
school
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 A and 7
votes
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 by substraction, regarding
school
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 B, but in terms of the least
amount
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 of voters
overall
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 in the 2 schools, going to the
science
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 and social
science
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 with a 11, 16 lovers for those subjects.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, amount, science, votes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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