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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries

The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries
The graph
illustrats
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illustrates
 the contrast in sales for
dressing
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the dress
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industray
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industry
, which
are
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is
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 sent to foreign states, being sold and measured by
tenth
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a tenth
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 of a billion (hundred
millions
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), in the years 1999 until 2003 .
Overall
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,
Mynamar
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Myanmar
 experienced the most dramatic fluctuation in the given period, being the lowest in 1999 and
maximazing
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maximising
 their profits in 2001, before the significant drop in 2003
being
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, being
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 less than
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japan
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Japan
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,
although
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 they had a good start, but slightly decreased in the shown interval,
in contrast
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 to their
partnars
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partners
 in
colombia
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Colombia
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, increasing slowly
while
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 time passes at all periods. To start things up, Myanmar soard from being the least in the year 1999 with less the 50
million
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, to above 900
million
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 in the course of 2001, before falling again to about 350
million
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 dollars in 2002 being the least selling exporter in the end by approximately 450
millions
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,
while
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Japan
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 and colombia competed and had their up's and downs, starting from
Japan
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 being the most seller in the interval of 1999 until the mid 2000s by around 560
million
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, and lessening through time, as opposed to colombia, being expanded and increacing being around 600
millions
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 in 2003,
while
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japan
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 recorded less than 500
millions
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 in the same year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, japan, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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