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the graph show the map of islip center. describe it

the graph show the map of islip center. describe it
The diagrams provide key information about
differences
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the differences
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 in
layout
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the layout
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 of
Islip
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the Islip
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 town
center
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centre
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 between nowadays and the planned development.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graphs that
biggest
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the biggest
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 changes
touched
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occurred in
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 the Northern part,
while
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 the remaining parts showed little change. Currently, the
filed
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field
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 consists of many shops between the main road, the countryside located in the north,
whereas
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 the park
placed
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is placed
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 in the south-east
,
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. Also
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also
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also,
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 there are two houses under the shop
in
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on
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south
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the south
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 side, just next to the school
which
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, which
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placed
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is placed
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 in the south-west. The planned development, the
center
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centre
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 will be
surrounding
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surrounded
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 by the Dual carriageway
,
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. Furthermore
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furthermore
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, there is new housing added in
south
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the south
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 area adjacent to the park and in the
north-East
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northeast
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 with
accessory
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an accessory
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 road
, the
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. The
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 main road will
replaced
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be replaced
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 by
the
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apply
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pedestrians.
Moreover
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, the north shops will
replaced
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be replaced
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 by many stores
such
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 as
bus
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the bus
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 station and
car
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the car
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 park. The facilities and shops in the south are unchanged.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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