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The best way to solve traffic congestions is to provide free public transport 7/24. To what extent do you agree or disagree

There is a debate about whether providing free public
transport
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 around the clock is the most effective solution to reduce
traffic
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 congestion in modern
cities
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.From my point of view,
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 there are some disadvantages, free public
transport
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 can play an important role in reducing
traffic
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 problems in large
cities
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. On the one hand, free public
transport
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 can cause several drawbacks. The most common issue is overcrowding. When
transport
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 is free of charge, more people may prefer buses and metros
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 of private cars.
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, vehicles can become very crowded, making travel uncomfortable and sometimes difficult for elderly or disabled passengers.
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, in crowded places, problems
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 as pickpocketing or arguments between passengers may happen more often.
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, operating buses and trains without ticket income can create financial pressure on governments, which may lead to higher taxes.
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, there are strong reasons why free public
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 helps reduce
traffic
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 congestion. First of all, one bus can carry many passengers at the same time, which directly lowers the number of private cars on the road.
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 not only decreases
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 jams but
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 reduces accidents during rush hours.
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, in
cities
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 like Istanbul, commuting can take more than two hours in peak times, but if people are encouraged to use public
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, travel becomes safer and faster.
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, fewer cars on the road means less air pollution and less fuel consumption, which benefits the whole society. In conclusion, even though free public
transport
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 has some disadvantages, I believe it is still an effective way to reduce
traffic
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 congestion in modern
cities
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. A balanced approach with government support can make
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content
Plan your answer. Say your view in one line in the intro, then give two or three clear reasons in order.
structure
Make each paragraph start with a clear idea sentence and end with a short note that links back to your view.
language
Use simple linking words like also, but, and because to show how ideas go with each other.
structure
The essay has a clear start and end.
cohesion
There are good links between ideas using words like On the one hand and In addition.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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