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Band 2

In the developed world, technological progress is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of radical technological advancements.

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that
technologia
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technology
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 it is commonly held belief that it may
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reduce
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problems
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 an argument that it is
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opposite
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I
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 that individuals should attempt to deal with it.
Body paragraph 2
To begin
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with
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technologia
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technology
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not deal
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even
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country
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those generations
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life
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nevertheless
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scared
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Body paragraph 3
Another point to
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that
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. These days it is not easy to find
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career
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companies
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focus
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: high
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 language and knowing how to use
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technology
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conclusion
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 there is no easy answer for
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However
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I tend
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Body paragraph 5
Individuals should
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focus
 on how they can improve
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their technological
 skills.
Conclusion
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structure
Plan your essay: use a clear start, 2 or 3 body parts, and a short end.
content
Make the idea in each paragraph clear. One problem or one fix per paragraph.
style
Use easy linking words to show how ideas go. For example, first, also, then, finally.
content
Give real examples that fit the task and explain them.
language
Check spell and grammar. Use common words and short forms.
content
Some ideas on how tech can hit jobs and skill are seen.
structure
The essay shows an effort to join with the task.
general
The writer tries to give a way to cut the harm of tech.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tech
  • change
  • job
  • work
  • skill
  • learn
  • school
  • life
  • time
  • health
  • mind
  • risk
  • harm
  • safe
  • help
  • data
  • law
  • rule
  • plan
  • cost
  • money
  • access
  • fair
  • equal
  • trust
  • open
  • use
  • power
  • control
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