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The diagram below shows an automatic photo booth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows an automatic photo booth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration presents
a
Correct article usage
apply
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data about the different parts of a machine that
works
Correct subject-verb agreement
work
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 automatically to take
a
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apply
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personal images and
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also
Verb problem
are also
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,
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apply
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 used for passport photos.
Overall
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, as shown in the
photon
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photon,
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 it is like a small place that we can set
at
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up
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 to get ready for the snapping, it has
small
Correct article usage
a small
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 opening on the outside
which
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, which
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 is for putting
coin
Correct article usage
a coin
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 in it
so
Punctuation problem
, so
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 it can start.
First,
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the exterior of the stall contains a rectangular metal which we put money
in
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apply
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it
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to start and
also
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 the setting of how you want your photo taken
like
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apply
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.
Then
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 after that, the person
enter
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enters
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 and
sit
Correct subject-verb agreement
sits
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 on the chair inside it. There is
mirror
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a mirror
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 for a final
touch up
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touch-up
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 and
also
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black
Correct article usage
a black
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 sheet with
hole
Correct article usage
a hole
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 directing where to look when the photo is taken.  Important tips
,
Punctuation problem
:
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 the curtains should be closed when the photo is taken
Linking Words
also
Punctuation problem
, also
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, a flash will
appeared
Wrong verb form
appear
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signaling
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signalling
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 that the camera will capture after 3
second
Fix the agreement mistake
seconds
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.
Finally
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,the final product will be ready after 1 minute
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 the person will take it
form
Use the right word
from
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outside
Correct article usage
the outside
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 booth.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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