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Band 5

People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Crowds debate whether it is necessary to allocate
money
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 for
taxes
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, and some believe that
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 of paying them,
people
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 should keep the
money
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 for themselves. I believe
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 could increase individuals’ budgets.
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, the significance of
taxes
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 to a country is large — without them, a country cannot even provide basic services like healthcare and education. A more specific discussion will be presented in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, forbidding or decreasing the amount of
taxes
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 could be noticed by
people
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 in several ways. Having more
money
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 would expand the range of things they had planned to purchase. With a larger budget on hand,
people
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 could give more attention to their families, which has been decreasing over the years as
people
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 work more to earn
money
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. Currently, a large portion of
salary
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 goes to essential needs for survival,
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 as hygiene products, food, and electricity.
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, the loss of
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 would have a negative impact on
people
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’s lifestyles.
Taxes
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 are the budget that the government uses for the well-being and development of the country.
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 includes increasing military strength,
modernizing
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 hospital technology, improving the quality of education, and maintaining public roads.
People
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 who are against
taxes
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 are not thinking long-term — they assume that
taxes
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 are spent on unnecessary things, without
realizing
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 that the
money
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 they pay funds the services they use in daily life. In conclusion,
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taxes
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 can limit
people
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’s ability to meet personal needs, they provide essential public services, so the
money
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 spent is not meaningless.

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Make your main view clear at the start and keep it in all parts.
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Add one or two real examples or facts to back each idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to join ideas and make the flow smoother.
structure
Clear use of two sides with 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand'.
argument
The finish state that taxes are needed fits the prompt.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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