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Writing Samples
Band 2

Many people have realised that our whole world, is globalised now but not everyone supports that it is favourable for us. Globalisation have now affected each & every part of the world but it has its then fors and againsts.

The globalisation
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Globalisation
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not is
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is not
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 favourable for everyone
becouse
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because
 a lot
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people
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of people
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thinking
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think
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this
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 situation
affect
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affects
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positive
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both positive
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 and negative us.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 the
word
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world
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need
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needs
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economics
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economic
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 changes
quiky
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quickly
 and move
in
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into
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differents
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different
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 products for long distances
but
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, but
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 it is same important for grow up from the
countys
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countries
. On the
firts
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first
 hand
it
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, it
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interesting
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is interesting
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 when big
companies
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 move money and products
arround
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around
 the
word
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world
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but
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, but
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i
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I
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understan
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understand
 it is
dificult
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difficult
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in at
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at
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a
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 few
countys becouse
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countries because
 many
people
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 need different
tinks
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things
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but
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, but
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Linking Words
this
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these
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companies
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do no
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no
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not
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working
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work
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for
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to
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 help
try
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apply
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a
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apply
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specific
people
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, just looking
money
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for money
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.
For
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instance
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instance,
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Cocacola
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Coca-Cola
from
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apply
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use
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uses
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 natural
reourse
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resources
 from
this
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countre
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country
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 when
have
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making
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 a fabric. On the
second
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other
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hand
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hand,
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Linking Words
this
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these
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companies
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workink
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work
 together
many with
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with many
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Goverments
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governments
.
For
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example
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example,
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Linking Words
this
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these
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companies
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 help
pour
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poor
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people
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 and give work
for
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to
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 all
people
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 in any country, and pay taxes for that
one
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apply
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,
i
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I
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 think so it is 50% 50%
this
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colaboration
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collaboration
but
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, but
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 in the
especifics countrys
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specific countries
 not it easy and probably have
a
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apply
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problems. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
i
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I
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thik
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think
 it is important the
globalitation
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globalisation
 for all topics, but
this
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 one
need
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needs
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 controls and smart
people
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becouse
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because
 it is important
balance
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to balance
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 in the
word
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world
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, i
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. I
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 know
is
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it is
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 very difficult
but
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, but
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 step by step
w
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we
Verb problem
can impruve
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impruve
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improve
 that.

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Structure
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro that says what you think about globalisation and what you will talk about.
Language
Use easy grammar. Check spelling and keep short sentences.
Content/Organization
Give one clear example for each idea. A paragraph can talk about one idea.
Coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go with each other, like 'also', 'but', 'however'.
Content
The essay shows a good attempt to discuss both sides.
Examples
Use of Coca-Cola example helps point a real link.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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