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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled tea and pineapples in 2010 and 2015 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information about
Sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled
tea
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 and
pineapples
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 from 2010 to 2015 in 5 different European countries
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France
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, Austria,
Germany
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,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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,
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Norway
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and Norway
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. The
unites
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 are given in
millions
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 of
euros
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.
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,
France
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 and Austria were leaders of
tea
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 and
pineapples
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 trading, respectively
in
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, in
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 those periods,
while
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Norway
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 and
Germany
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 were in the
last
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 positions.
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, almost all these
countries
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been
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grown; exclude
Norway
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 and
Germany
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,
which
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where
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sales
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 of
pineapples
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 have
been
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declined.
According to
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 the table of
tea
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sales
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 in 2010 in
France
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 exported 2.5
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millions
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million
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of
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euros
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and
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their
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its
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 trading rocketed approximately 10 times and reached 21
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millions
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million
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 in 2015
,
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.
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 Austrian
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tea-
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tea sales
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sales
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 started
since
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at
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 4 and
grown
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grew
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 to 8,
Germany
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since
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from
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 2.8 to 3,
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the
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Netherlands from 2 to 2.7 and
Norway
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since
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from
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 1.8 to 2
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millions
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million
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of
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euros
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. It means
tea
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sales
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 were only
raising
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rising
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was
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more
successful
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successfully
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 than pineapple trading. Situation with
pineapples
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 that Austria sold that fruits
on
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for
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 16
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millions
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million
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of
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euros
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 in 2010 and three times more in 2015 (48
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millions
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million
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),
France
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 2 and 6.5, Netherlands 1.6 and 5, but
Norway
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 waned and showed 2.8 and 2, the same circumstances happened with
Germany
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, which sold
since
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from
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 3 to 1.9.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, tea, pineapples, france, germany, norway, millions, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales figures
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • European countries
  • increase/decrease
  • growth/decline
  • trends
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • highest/lowest sales
  • figures
  • comparisons
  • time frame
  • consistent growth
  • main trends
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