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The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of visitors to four different museums in London between June and October 2015.
Overall
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, the
British
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Museum
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 consistently attracted the highest number of visitors, especially in August, and the National
Museum
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 remained the least popular throughout the period.
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, August was the peak month for most museums,
whereas
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 October generally recorded the lowest figures. In June and July, the
British
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Museum
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, the History
Museum
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, and the Science
Museum
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 all attracted around 400,000 people, compared with only about 200,000 at the National
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. Numbers
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 rose sharply in August, when the
British
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Museum
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 reached about 700,000 and the History
Museum
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 600,000,
while
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 the Science
Museum
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 stayed stable at around 400,000. The National
Museum
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also
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 increased slightly, peaking at 300,000. After August, attendance declined. In September, the
British
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Museum
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 still led with nearly 600,000 visitors, followed by the Science
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 with about 500,000. By October, figures dropped noticeably in all museums, particularly the History
Museum
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, which fell to around 250,000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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